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Lonelyboy90: I can tell that your good in writing because the poems come natural to you. Ever think of being a poet or a journalist?
on August 20, 2006 5:01 PM | |
polyatomics: The rhythm is beautiful, and the words are perfect. Especially "Murderous, bitter black coffee", and the ending line. You'll have no problem getting someone to publish these.
on August 18, 2006 5:03 PM | |
QhBaRrElChIc: Amazing! I think this is the best poem you have written so far!!!!!! I'm speechless again but I like the feeling is leaves me after I have read it...I agree you should get this published! 10 stars!!!!!!!
on July 24, 2006 11:57 AM | |
Lord_Xing: Wow...that kind of got my mind to start thinking..Puts shame to my poem, especially the wide range of vocabulary. It took me a few to get the deeper meaning behind it, because I kept coming up with different views. At first I misread antipathy and thought I saw apathy (left out the nti haha), so it made me prepared for the feeling of non-caring, and the poem fit that kind of perspective too, as if everyone had just given up and no longer caring, "Fortune cookie sweetheart love
Shriveled by corporate cyanide
Receiving less for striving more
Cheated, never repaid ". Even with the correct word I can't get that feeling away, but I can see what Miles was talking about, and perhaps it was more of what you were aiming for. Either way, good job on the poem, and next time I'll read the words that are there instead of omitting parts lol. (I blame it on the lack of sleep)
on July 23, 2006 1:02 AM | |
dark_redemption: you should get this published
it's so... beautiful and i love the meaning behind it
on July 22, 2006 6:45 PM | |
Miles2go505: I think this poem is about the secrets hidden in all of us I can relate to it. It left me speechless. . .
on July 22, 2006 4:47 PM | |
_tay: You've got me enthralled.
This is amazing.
on July 22, 2006 4:18 PM | |
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