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Bare and Simple
by Righteous_Vigilante
written on July 18, 2006 11:07 PM
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These plastic Wal-Mart sunglasses, digging in my hair
Walking down this parking lot—quite forlorn and soaked
Droplets of a foreign tongue keep falling;none to spare
Finland complications, grammar I can’t hold
Shake away the deep moronic waste, your eyes
Their obsolete deceit
I’m just vying for the intricacies birthed in your
Own mouth
When you asked me to dive down
In your shallow morning “Sundaes”

And I cry

Take my green tea leaves enclosed in my hand
Pin-pricked consolation that’s sprayed all galore
A baby’s hue of softened gray
Sleeps beneath my tree
Like Buddha in a summer daze
Please wait until we cannot speak
No more

Am I trudging up the highway now, not a space for me?
In between the doors of Charlotte’s Jeep, a BM-Double-U
Robbers in the trunk--how I feel, sandals start to creep
Along, side by side, can’t remember what I’ve asked of you
And do I hear a bike ride, crisp white shirt
And the breathing of a Dapper-gorgeous tie
Am I just bidding for a chance for my kids
To pray alright?
And so I think; make a mission
That I know you can’t fulfill
So I feel, I can’t tell you…

Take my green tea leaves enclosed in my hand
Pin-pricked consolation that’s sprayed all galore
A baby’s hue of softened gray
Sleeps beneath my tree
Like Buddha in a summer daze
Wait until we cannot speak
No more

I’m heading back, knee hits ground and then I start
To dream
Of S.L.C.

Bare and Simple

__________________________
*Inspired by the brilliance of Jacks Mannequin, A.K.A. Andrew McMahon from Something Corporate.

*This is a set of song lyrics. I'm currently writing music for it via guitar.

*It has some religious references, but it's all in a good, optimistic light. S.L.C. stands for "Salt Lake City".

*Please bare with me if you find the format to be a little warped. This site has a limit as to how many words can fit on a line, and it so happens that some words got shifted over. Darnit! Just read it smoothly. Don't let the false line breaks throw you off.



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Miles2go505: It's an interesting out look on things. I like it because it's different from songs that are popular no that really have no meaning to me i just like listening to them.
on July 23, 2006 1:44 PM
picturebroken: brilliant lyrics. most of the songs you hear on the radio today are just beats and words with no thought or real writing involved. this should make a very good song. it already makes a perfect poem.
on July 19, 2006 6:20 PM
SilverScent: Very original write, and interesting song lyrics. I always find it hard to comment on lyrics because you need at least some backing melody to truly appreciate it. Very good wording anyway, I enjoyed the read.
on July 19, 2006 11:26 AM
QhBaRrElChIc: I LOVE it! Very powerful word usage. I know you said you worked on it a lot and it does show. I'm not sure if you were still going to change some things but so far from what i've read it's very good! Me personally I wouldn't change anything...But you are the artist and this is your work so that's totally up to you. Very good job!
on July 18, 2006 11:42 PM


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