September 3, 2010 11:26am 364 online Daily: If you were old enough, would you go to a Nude beach, and actually get nude? Why/Why not? Click here to answer
Home Articles Forums Blogs Chat Win Stuff Games Pics Advice Writing Quizzes Listings More...
We hope that everybody has a great Labor Day weekend. Hide Message
Find a school near you!
Zip Code:
Online
Campus
Both
Subject:
Degree:
You are here:
SCN
Poetry
Poem

POETRY


Home  My Poems  Showcase  Search  Rate Poems  Bust-A-Rhyme

Bystanders in the Rain
by Righteous_Vigilante
written on July 17, 2006 4:04 PM
 (9.7 stars)
3 users have rated this poem
This poem has been viewed 24 times
Rate this poem: 

Leave feedback

Read feedback (6)

Random Poem


We’re gonna take a walk, let it go to our heads
Imperious shadows we leave to stain
Dirtying laughter that came too late
As a solar eclipse went crying
With the ground so slick, soles trying to be flat
A willow tree dead, no children in shelter
Looking around for pedestrian STOP signs
“Keep walkin’ or I’ll break your will”
There’s a rock in the corner, dark n’ all
Clutter inside with cigarette sex
Fumes erect on a dented window
Slapping those clear, pale cheeks
Knowing her, recalling, soccer field songs
Dandelions threaded, her thick puffy brooch
Makin’ her look like a puppy, full frolic
And presently a bitch in false hiding

Walking, walking, scuttling away
Forgetting, so we won’t fall down



Feedback
Read what other people have to say about this poem!

SilverScent: I liked the use of the couplet at the end, brought the poem to a strong finish. I've never been too keen on shortened English eg "gonna" in poetry, it reminds me of pre-teen girl rants so that's my only criticism. The rest was well worded as always and a good read. Keep it up!
on July 19, 2006 11:40 AM
QhBaRrElChIc: I love how everything in this poem is crystal clear and easy to follow. You have a gift is all I can say!!!
on July 18, 2006 11:19 PM
picturebroken: your poetry is really pretty..painting broken images of love and the world crashing around it. i found a lot of stunning symbolism in this particular poem. really cool.
on July 18, 2006 10:25 PM
Lord_Xing: I really liked the last stanza. This poem really stands out, and very nice way of doing it. Everything seems so original! Very well written.
on July 17, 2006 10:53 PM
fauxafflictionqueen: that title is awesome. i hate one word titles thats just me though. and i can really feel what ur trying to say here. its great
on July 17, 2006 4:56 PM
emo_tears90: I love this! it's awesome
on July 17, 2006 4:33 PM


Leave Feedback
Leave your feedback below.
Click here to register for free!
D I L E T T A N T E
E
Check out our interview on MO.com!
Save on Textbooks Now!
Win an extra 500 points each day for taking surveys. Other prizes as well.
Buy Your Used Textbooks Here http://usedtextbooks.net
College Search from College Toolkit
Get homework help
student.com t-shirts are here!
Teen Blogs
Student Loans Insight - Blog articles, tips, news and information about student loans and college funding for students and parents.
All Natural Study Aid
Online Degrees - are perfect for the working adult who wants to further their education.
Packing Supplies - http://www.movingdayboxes.com moving and packing supplies shipped overnight to your home or office. free shipping.
Skateboards.com - Largest selection of skateboard products online.
SNOWBOARDS
SchoolTechTV

Warning: mysql_close(): 35 is not a valid MySQL-Link resource in /usr/local/apache/stop_4.inc on line 20
Timestamp: 03-Sep-2010 11:09 Error code: -14 Error message: DB Error: no database selected Debug string: UPDATE `access` SET `create_date` = '' , `ip` = '' , `server` = '' , `page` = '' , `load_time` = 0.2768 WHERE ( `access`.`id` = '' ) [nativecode=**] Site: teenpoetry.student.com