*It's really only half of a song, but I'm working on a couple more verses..*
I bet you're gonna call her
When you never even bothered
To pick up the phone for me.
I bet you're hold her
Rest her head on you shoulder when
You're falling asleep.
All you were was a friend for me
Now she's got you
Waiting at her feet
Chorus:
Take a closer look at how you breathe
How you never held out your hand for me
Hows she got you wrapped around her finger
While you hold your heart out on your sleeve.
Take a closer look at who you've become
How you've learned to watch who you trust.
All I'm asking now, hope it's not too much,
Why couldn't I have had the you,
That she's holding now?
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hemlock_or_nightshade: this is gonna b awesome wen u finish it! u got real talent!
on July 23, 2006 11:15 AM
FaDeDhEaRt569: I like your song and reflects on alot of people once you finish make sure it get postd i would loved to read you never know one day that will be your first hit single you'll have a record deal and alll Dream big and nver back down!!!! -bde569 on January 23, 2006 12:31 AM
Colton369: The chorus is really strong. Once you add more to it, I think it would make a pretty good song. ^_^ on January 22, 2006 10:38 PM
