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sweetlilash16: i think it's wonderful!!.. and everything you said about god it seems oh so familar to me..and yeah maybe everything god does is for a reason but that doesn't mean that everything he may do is nice... so i don't think in anyway that it's disrespectful... and i say keep writtin what you feel cuz it's great..hit me back..<3!!ASH!!
on August 10, 2006 1:42 AM | |
Bubbles008: I liked the poem, especially the meaning that I got out of it, and I disagree with what some people said about you disrespecting God (It's just a poem, get what you want out of it). In one of the lines I think there may be a mistake with the grammar, " and curse the way they made me felt", I know that you were trying to make it rhyme with "dealt", but - correct me if I'm wrong- it should be: "and curse the way it made me feel" or "and curse the way that I have felt" ( I don't think the second one I came up with really works with your poem though. Anyway... I hope it helped, and sorry if I mis-corrected you, I do that sometimes. Good work.
~ Ashley
on December 06, 2005 4:32 PM | |
jennifer12838: Hey great poem.... I don't exactly like the line where you shout to God saying that was mean because I believe that everything God does is for a reason and it is disrespectful to Him if you blame him.... But nonetheless it was great. Please don't be offended or anything because I am just saying how I feel and if you don't feel the same way then its still ok.
Peace out & God Bless,
Jennifer
on August 08, 2005 7:48 PM | |
wowkiddo22: i love it
on August 06, 2005 7:33 PM | |
emo_tears90: i think its good..i like the line about the sky too....
on August 04, 2005 8:06 PM | |
crackhead666: it was short and i love it lol
on August 03, 2005 8:10 PM | |
Dreamerpoet: wow...im with fate. that line i cry with the sky...wicked awesome.
on August 03, 2005 5:35 PM | |
sexkitten4u2: I LIKE IT!
on July 24, 2005 1:35 PM | |
_Fate_: sometimes I cry with the sky! WOAH that was such a sweet line, can't honestly say I liked the rest, but that line was awesome!
on July 23, 2005 8:27 PM | |
MoonPoet88: No i don't think tht he's blaming god i juss think tht ur confused and don't kno who 2 blame...i do tht sometimes...good poem
on January 30, 2005 10:45 PM | |
mandee17: good poem...but ur not blmaing God r u?
on January 30, 2005 9:58 PM | |
if_i_had_a_life: i love this poem
on December 12, 2004 9:40 PM | |
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