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California Menace - LEAVE FEEDBACK PLEASE
by Moses_Malone95
written on September 13, 2004 11:52 PM
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Everybody couldn’t forget the summer of 1980
When innocent people were getting slaughtered daily
People ignored the reports of an escaped prisoner
That was serving a life sentence for a double murder
It didn’t take him long to claim his first victim
The cops had never seen a killing so gruesome
Now nobody was safe in the city of Los Angeles
So many people dead but not a single witness
Two weeks later the cops finally got there break
The murder had finally made his first mistake
Someone called to report some screaming
This witness was different because she was struggling
He left before the cops had a chance to arrive
The victim was hurt but managed to survive
She’d seen him well enough to give a description
They finally had a face to put on this demon
A sketch immediately sent to the local media
That night it was on the news all over California
The cops got a call he was seen speeding on the highway
They knew they had to act fast before he could get away
He led them down a barren country street
Then they saw him pick something up off his seat
It was gun he stuck it out the window and began firing
The cops had to dodge him but continue driving
He stopped, got out, and continued to fire
One by one taking out every officer’s tire
Then he began to shout “If I’m going down, I’m taking you with me”
Exchanging fire with them, taking them out easily
He didn’t stop until he got every single one
Turning the gun on himself when he was done



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: Awsome if i hav 2 read a poem 4 skool, this is it!
on September 14, 2004 5:23 AM
Missy: Hey. Great poem. Seems as though it COULD be a true story. Scary one too! I felt a lot if different emotions...which is good. Keep on writing great story converted into a poem good idea!! <3Missy p.s. i think you know how frusterating it is to not get any feedback so if you could please leave me some on mine (Kisses4unme69) then i'd really love it!
on September 10, 2004 8:23 AM
humpty_was_pushed aka britt: i really love this poem. its so powerful and emotional. keep up ur great writting peace out
on September 10, 2004 1:29 AM
Mishelle: damn...ur poem was tiight!! it was really good...props.....keep em coming!!
on September 10, 2004 12:57 AM
: OMG, that is awesome! especially the last line.
on September 10, 2004 12:45 AM
Rob: very powerful. im assuming this is fictional. nevertheless, it stops and makes you wonder. for me, i asked myself how capable the police REALLY are of protecting us. the thing is, alot of criminals are smarter than the police. thats whats scary. great poem, keep it up. i give it a 9
on September 09, 2004 5:40 PM


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